Проверьте текст the modern world cannot be imagined without shopping. there are a lot of different shops in the world. there are famous supermarkets and little shops in the cities. they sell a variety of goods: fashion clothes, footwear, jewellery, home furnishing, food, cosmetic and perfume, books, hi-fi, toys and etc. to be a customer you must have money. i often go to the shop to buy the food at the request of parents, paying in cash. sometimes i go to the shop to buythe expensive things.it can be a laptop, phone or game console. i look about for a long time buying these things; ask a lot of questions to the consultant. in this case, i pay with a credit card. i prefer the large network of shops, because there are very small chances of fraud in them. sometimes i go to the cinemas, museums and attractions, where i spend money buying tickets. in my opinion the ideal buyer must be not rude man who respects consultant’s help. i see ideal consultant not too pushy but ready to help at any time.
Fashionable clothes тоже сказать будет лучше.
I look about for a long time buying these things - I look for a long time on the thing when I am buying it.
Я бы еще убрал в конце второго абзаца where I spend money buying tickets.
А так все остальное хорошо, молодец!