3класс. рассказ о члене семьи, как его написать?

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My name is Dan. I have a big family.My family is vere friendly and kind. My mother is  a teacher. My father is a businessman. My granny and grandpa are pensioners. I like when my mother reads me books and buys new toys. And I like go fishing with my dad and grandpa.And of course i like my granny's apple cakes. Every Saturday we  go to the park together with our dog Rex. I love my family very much.

I would like to tell about my greatgrandfather. He is now 85 years old. He lives with my greatgrandmother not far away from us. He is very brave. He took part in World War Two. He was a soldier at that time. After the War he decided to be a military man. He became a general. I like his strories about his life in the army. I am very proud of my greatgrandfather.